Out To Sea

you took all that i held dear
without shedding a single tear.
the only thing you left behind
was a mile deep scar on my mind.
i can't see,but i can still hear
you whisper those words in my ear.
you left nothing else here for me
and you let my soul drift out to sea.
my life will now slowly fall apart,
as you sail away with my broken heart.

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Sep 23rd 2005

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i think i wrote this one today...i'm not sure..this week has been a very confusing week.

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mewchild Says:

Aw. D: That's sad. ):
D: I'm at a loss for words.

Normally I think Lain is weird and ugly, but this picture's pretty good.
Watercolours~
You draw it?

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xperimentslain Says:

im so incredibly touched and saddened by this piece, simple and beautiful, tragic and emotional, i can feel your pain kia kaha (stay strong)

omegareaper Says:

Ah.. It's very good...

Why can everybody seem to rhyme that good, except for me

Blacktiger55 Says:

very beautiful job on the ryhming and the emotions.

shinzo Says:

Aww wow, i really like this, the pic is ace and so is the poem! ^-^

Tot Herz Says:

wow...ok..i need to say it.
thank you.thank you so much.
i don't think any of my other poems have gotten this much attention.

i need to write more "Epic Poems" (i.e.; There Goes My Gun and The Last Stand)
those are fun.i'll work on one sometime..