The first poem I wrote this weekend. Oddly enough I didn't start off writing this about anyone in particular, but when I was finished I noted a few people I know who fit this description well. But anyway, enjoy the piece and don't forget to leave a comment for a poor fellow.
Comments
Nivalis Says:
What a coincidence you wrote this while being with your relatives. I really don't understand your way of thinking! D:
...LOL.
You did an excellent job describing this, it's amazing how good you are at putting yourself in the place of others! Good job, as always!
randomoo Says:
Wowowow!
Wonderful vocabular you have here =) And you've got some great imagery.
Have you ever tried different punctuation and capitilization, though? Also, instead of one whole poem, you could break up lines and make stanzas. These things really help emphasize the strongest points in your poem =) Experimenting with these things is always tons of fun. Take advantage of your artistic license!!