"O! Spiny Spine!" - For Sarah

by Doctor Dolittle

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"O! Spiny Spine!" - For Sarah

Fourteen yellow clacky teeth
And seven bloody sockets
Peeling off my cataracts
To keep them in a locket

O spiny spine inside my back!
Where are the vertebrae I lack?

Bulbous knuckles, child's hands
The months under my nails
Which remain unclipped (scratch at my hips!)
On fingers gaunt as rails

O spiny spine inside my back!
Why are my eyelids turning black?

Instead of gold, a cage of ribs
The stand of legs grown hairy
In my cage, the atrophied heart
The croaking, dead canary

O spiny spine inside my back!
Why do you make me heave and hack?

Decaying brain, and rotting mind
Meninges turn to mush
Leak out my nose and into my throat
Filthy, acrid slush

O spiny spine inside my back!
Where is my life, my bones in a sack?

O spiny spine! My skin grows pale!
Whyever did you crack and fail?

-With love and black bile, for Sarah
> '"Miss You Already"' by Doctor Dolittle

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Mar 24th 2009
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I know I submitted this roughly 5 minutes ago, but I had to delete the original. It had too much tweeting around in the comments. I really like that feature, SheezyArt. I really love how you took away the ability to delete comments (AND the ability to use previews?! WOW, SHEEZY! YOU ARE SO NICE! IT IS SO MY LUCKY DAY!).

Anywho, writing is not my strength, which is a very kind way to say "I fucking suck." But hey, I tried.

PS: I think you know what inspired this. (Hint: TEETH AND DROOL!)

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koshizzle Says:

i love how violent this feels.

koshizzle Says:

and when i say violent, i don't mean like...punching. i mean something else that i haven't got right words for yet.

FUNDERFUL Says:

:) i love it.

pur plec loud Says:

Ugh I just love the darkness in this. I know there's a better word for what I mean, but my English is failing me at the moment.

I'll say it again, you seriously don't give yourself enough credit. I don't read poetry on Sheezy, but I love reading yours.

LAEluu Says:

It's very dark, but whimsical at the same time. (:

Kind of like RoR, but with less mermaids/cleaning ladies.