The Boy Beneath the Playground.

by Imperial Obsession

in W r i t i n g .

The Boy Beneath the Playground.

There’s always that one kid you see in the playground, under the jungle gym, hiding from the rest of the kids. His clothes are a little crinkled, but never muddy. His face is always clean, but his tears make his cheeks shimmer. The sun shafts through the metal grating above him just right to make the little world where he’s sitting a sun-speckled paradise.

And he’s always crying. Well, sometimes he’s giggling to himself, or reading. But most of the time he’s crying. He makes you wonder…why? For just a moment, you want to be there with him. To stop the wondering, the crying, if anything.

But you never talk to him. Things are just like that.

Not today, though. A few feet behind you, your friends whisper and laugh and gossip, already drawing second-grade bets of chewing gum and bouncy balls over whether or not you’ll actually go through with it.

Sigh, shuffle. Shuffle, sigh.

You bend your head slightly so you don’t hit the grating and duck into the separate, secret, perfect, immaculate world that you’ve wanted to enter so many times before. He’s still crying, silently. You ask him; he blinks, his crying petering into sniffles.

Silence, for a moment, then he leans over.

I’m invisible,” he whispers in your ear.

And for some strange reason, that makes you want to cry.

Description

Oct 10th 2008
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A piece of flash fiction (a very short story that is usually anywhere between 6-2,000 words).

Earnest Hemingway had a very famous example with his 6-word flash fiction:

"For sale: baby shoes, never worn."

Pretty much, the only restrictions on a flash fiction is that there must be elements of a short story-- i.e., there has to be a main character, a plot/problem, a solution. Whether they are actually written, however, or just implied, is another story.

This is for a 225-word challenge, and the theme is "Invisible".

Preview Pic (c) unconditional love @ dA

Comments

WildBlueSun Says:

I was that kid. =(

Beautiful piece.

pur plec loud Says:

I was that kid too D:
So little words, and yet it implies so many things...

Sato Ayako Says:

First of all, superb! I'm more of an action-junkie, so it didn't really speak to me, but I really liked the construction, the description, and the third-person omniscient narration. TPO doesn't often work. You pulled it off so well.

I can't help but correct you on the definition of "flash fiction". Currently, "flash fiction" is defined as 1000 words or less. Other than that nitpick, I have nothing else to add.

Icarity Says:

I currently am the one that goes up to those kids and asks why the aren't hanging around with their friends. Then I become their friend =D

Akean Says:

aww so sad

Satchan Says:

Nice. ^-^

Inadvertant Angel Says:

Very well done, I am quite glad that I read this story. In fact, I shall add it to my favorites.