Something So Perfect

by Grape juice

in Writing

Something So Perfect

My heart pursues you like the trickling of piano keys to a melody.
The connection between our minds is linked like the lyrics to a song.
The rhythm of the fastest beat is slow compared to my pulse near you.

When you're close to me, I've nothing to fear but your next move.
The slightest sensation of your touch sets off the butterflies
that tingle throughout my body like the the thrill of a roller coaster.

Even if our conversation makes my reason nervous with what to say,
If for only an instant, our silence makes me comfortable as summer
and all doubts melt from my discomposed state.

Your incandescent light inspires my heart to stand brave.
The dull, bleak skies above threaten nothing to me now,
My heart can always withstand evil with you in mind.

You are always fresh like that of a changed season.
Crisp affection rejuvenates my greening soul
the wonderful you planted and nurtured.

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Sep 2nd 2008
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love romance
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Yup, a love poem.

I've revamped and revamped but I just feel awkward no matter how I write it.

Suggestions? Constructive Criticism?

Thank you :)


***got the picture from Photobucket. Search "Love" and its like the 5th page in or something***

Comments

Strawz Says:

YOU SUBMITTED IT~!
I stand by everything I said before. :'D I love it.

Become So Numb Says:

This is really beautiful. I love the meaning

Ninachan Says:

I like how you connected each stanza and made them sound very well together

it is very romatic

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