|
|
Sonic Meets Luna, Chapter 2
Sonic and Tails flew high over the lake. Flames everywhere in sight, the beautiful green pastures now pitch black. Sonic hopped off the tornado, diving head first toward the ground, diving through the smoke. Only to find out it was Eggman, with an octopus like machine, with one of its tentacles into the lake.
As Sonic landed on the ground he shouted, “Eggman! What are you up to this time?”
“Hoho,”Eggman laughed, “why if it isn’t my good friend Sonic the hedgehog? Well if you want to know so badly, why don’t you take a look in the lake?” Eggman said pointing to the lake.
Sonic gave him a cold stare, and looked down at the lake, then WAM! One of the machines tentacles hit him from behind. “Ugh!” Sonic cried out in pain.
The impact of the tentacle was rough and knocked Sonic into the lake. Dropping deeper and deeper down into the lake, Sonic slowly began to open his eyes, and saw the white cat, he had seen from before, unconscious underneath one of the tentacles in the water. Seeing the cat in danger, he swiftly raced toward her to try to pull her out. It was no use, Sonic couldn’t pull her out the machines tentacle was too strong.
A massive impact was heard from above the waters. Sonic leaped out of the water quickly, only to find a red echidna named Knuckles, attacking the octopus like machine.
“Hey Knuckles!” Sonic shouted out, “there’s someone down here, can you try to get this over grown suck fish’s tentacle out of the water?”
“Sure thing Sonic,” Knuckles shouted out and gave thumbs up.
Knuckles used his mighty fists to forcefully pull the machine’s tentacle out of the water and swing it around and around, and manage to swing him away some distance from the lake.
“No!” Eggman shouted, “You can’t de-,” Tails swiftly knocked him over with his two tails.
With Eggman lying on the ground facing his defeat once again, Sonic ran and jumped into the lake to save the white cat. Sonic dived head first into the water and grabbed the cat, as her eyes slightly began to open. Sonic leaped from the lake to lay the white cat on the ground, hoping that she was okay.
Tails walked toward Sonic and held his shoulder and said, “She’s ok, she just unconscious, in due time, she will wake up, maybe we should carry her to Cream’s house to make her fully recover.”
Sonic nodded.
Knuckles walked in and said, “Who is this girl Sonic?”
“I don’t know,” Sonic replied, “but I’m pretty sure we’ll find out sooner or later.
|
|
Comments
Kagorae Says:
i like all the detail
wargod2007 Says:
hmmm......Luna stumbled upon the Sonic world O:
Interesting indeed... :3
Nintendo Savi Says:
wow sonic learnd to swim O.o. great job
mechgod Says:
love it cant wait to see what happens nexst
vampire209 Says:
nice work ^^ cnt wait to read the next installment
poor Luna tho! I hope she'll be ok ~__~
Light Trainer Says:
Woah! I can't wait for the next one!
Daemon6 Says:
Awesome!
xXNekoXChanXx Says:
Awesome! this story isnt based sonic x cause sonic can swim right? oh and you made a gramatical error. She is just unconscious. Not She just unconsious. (Or She's just unconsious can work too )
Arctic Master Says:
Sonic can swim?! O_O" I'm just bedazzled by that. I recall that Sonic HATED jumping into water...
Aside from all of that, Nice next entry.
darkshortyx Says:
Its a really good extension to that beginning you had^^ although you did have some weird spots which fits into your story, but does not go with sonic's rules.
one is when you said, "Sonic leaped out of the water quickly." In both Sonic X (which is not cannon) and the sonic games, sonic cannot jump/leap out of the water "quickly." You could have said " sonic headed for the surface as fast as he could, only to find...." Or the lake wasn't just that deep, but you did say, "Dropping deeper and deeper down into the lake, Sonic slowly began to open his eyes." so, it must not be too shallow.
when Eggman said "“No!†then got hit by tails. I think eggman would have been floating on that egg thing looking from above. so when he said NO, he probably would have said "you'll pay for this sonic the hedgehog." or something like that. The hitting eggman with tails was different, and I liked it. but I think eggman would have noticed. unless he was distracted by knuckles.
now when you said this, "Sonic dived head first into the water and grabbed the cat," I think you over looked sonic's fear/dislike with water. He could have easily said, " Knuckles(or Tails), theres a cat in this lake unconscious! I need you to go down there and bring her up!" or something other than what you said is fine.
He has dived into water before, but he didn't have assistants then. so its all fine in the end, just kinda weird.
but then you said, "Sonic leaped from the lake to lay the white cat...." again with the leaping. especially with someone in hand.
also, when you said, "Tails walked toward Sonic and held his shoulder and said, “She’s ok, she just unconscious, in due time, she will wake up." when did tails grow up? plus, how does tails know shes ok? he should be worried as sonic, asking sonic "will she ok sonic?" Then after that, you could have did a funny thing where they had to do CPR on her. And all of them looked at each other saying, "Im not doing it." being too embarrased to put their lips on the girl. then they decide, "maybe we should carry her to Cream’s house she'll do it." agreed. then they go^^ could be something else. this is off the top of my head.
So the last thing I wanna say is, what happened to Eggman? they just like left him laying there. did nothing.
It's still a good story. I like it^^ Keep up the good work xD