Sonic Meets Luna, Chapter 1

Chapter 1

It was a normal day in Mobius, with Sonic the Hedgehog running free as normal. Running past the green like pastures he known as home, with the wind pressing against his face, it was a beautiful day as the sunlight shined bright. As he ran past a lake, he noticed a white cat with long hair; he gave her a mere glance and ran past.
Some time after, Sonic joined up with a yellow fox with two tails named Miles, but was preferred as Tails.
“Hey Sonic, I just finished fixing up the tornado, want to come along and test it?” Tails said to Sonic as he was pointing to a small blue aircraft.
Bam! An explosion was heard from the lake Sonic had passed earlier, they both jumped in shock.
Sonic had remembered the white cat he had seen by the lake and said, “Looks like we’re going to test the tornado after all, let’s head over by the lake and see what’s going on.”
Sonic and Tails raced toward the tornado and hopped inside it. Sonic and Tails toke off soaring into the sky. They flew high, only to find smoke covering the air over the lake.
“It must be Eggman!” Tails shouted.
“What!” Sonic said to Tails, “I wonder what he’s after this time.

> Just Maybe

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Feb 25th 2008

Tags:: fantasy manga science-fiction youth
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ya... im in the writing mood for some reason
n yea i no the first chapter is quite short, but i assure u that the next will be better than this ^^

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shadamy1 Says:

This is good, but only one mistake It's "ttok" not "toke". Don't be angry at me!

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wargod2007 Says:

oh yes the story I have read yesterday :3)))))

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Bajita 2006 Says:

ohhhhhhhhhhhhh..... not like the 8 books i have read for the past 2 weeks awwww man.. :(

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Daemon6 Says:

I like this story so far. ^^

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Jim Prower Says:

You're a beginner, I have no problem with that, but you probably could've attached this little blurb onto your next chapter.

I usually aim for four pages or more per chapter in MS Word, 12pt Times Font, when I write, but you might want to aim for a page or so to get started. NEVER be afraid to go over the limit you've set for yourself. In fact, you can usually find good spots to put a Chapter "marker" fairly easily when you get used to it.

Writing can be hard, very hard, but it can be a lot of fun, too. You can go really smoothly, and then, all the sudden, it all gets hitched up and you spend weeks trying to get around your block. A few more tips?

Read. Read. Read some more. emulate your favorite writer's style.
Watch movies with similar themes or scenes to what you want to write. it can give you an idea of how to get a good flow out of your work
DETAIL: I cannot stress this enough: you could literally double your writing here by making your descriptions more detailed.

Most of all, Don't get discouraged. It's easy to get caught up in thinking, "There's no way I could write like that." But everyone's gotta start somewhere, and this is a good place.