Title Card WIP ~PLEASE Critique!~

by BewareTheJim

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Aug 12th 2007
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from other side stories
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This is still missing the background, which is a big ol' honkin' map of The Other Side.

What do you think?

The lettering is the biggest IF here, I'm not sure if I'm happy with it.
I like it, but is it appropriate? Also, how's the composition? Who should I move around? Make bigger, smaller, etc....

Come on, I need your help. Be MEAN.

Comments

Spring the Rabbit Says:

A bit colorful for my tastes but that's just me. I like dirt, you like candy... I guess. Whatev you know what I mean.

I dunno, could use some line variation. Simplest would be just a tad thicker stroke on the outside of the characters. Other than that, I like how this is put together. It makes me glee c:

FourPawLink Says:

I agree with Spring's comment about using a thicker stroke.
I personally like the lettering.

...Gotta say, I kinda like it.

Sageroot Says:

I actually think this loks great as is o-o MAYBE a lil thicker lines but othe than that I think its wodnerful dude O_O

Lillico Says:

the wording is just amazing.. the motion of all the characters (especially in the bottom) is just wonderful.. the King is looking especially menacing here I love the all the different colors in the characters in the bottom as well. they're all so youthful and child-like

mistergoodface Says:

I love the lettering reminds me of the ah real monsters days when they would have lettering that was worms and stuff. The spacing and composition seems good at the top but the bottom characters aren't very organized or arranged this doesn't seem like a real problem to me but you know what I mean.

knight block Says:

it looks so bright and wonderful