The redentor of darkness ch 1
3:00 AM, all ppl of sheezy town are safe, like always, all armies were fighting away in a field, dreadfish militia, sword army,swordfish elite and fish army, during a moment in the war, the earth opens, and a chaos dragon from hell showed up, so the war stopped for a few minutes, "Show your identidy" a soldier said,the dragon didn't say nothing, and just made his special attack to kill all soldiers, then the dragon backed to a normal dragon and got away, some soldiers survive, a fish soldier went to the city to warn all people, so the dragon took the direction there and hide.
The next day in the morning all was quiet and fine,Dakermon woke up"Today is going to be a good day

"he said. Few minutes later, Dakermon and all his friend went out,today was the drawing concurse. Participers where in the park,that was the place wher they where going to draw.
"ok,so let's wait johnny" Simhook said, he was a participer too "Hey, he's never late, you know how fast is him!" Dakermon replied,"Hey, keep practising and be prepare, we are all going just to start in 20 minutes" Dusty said. From a far distance, there was walkin a fish "Get away from here!!" she shouted, "Who are you??" Dakermon said, "Im Astellus, i've come from the war to warn that the town is in danger" Said, "What!?!?" All people said "A dragon from hell beated us, and i saw him heading towards here" Astellus said, "Huh, it will be easier to beat him,the problem that the armies are not kinda good" Morgan said as he trusted in his self, then Astellus Punch morgan's face "Im not joking,you bastard!" Astellus said angry, "People dont alarm, We will finish this concurse as fast as we can and then go to safety places" Dante, the mayor of Sheezy town said. "But the hell, where is johnny, he is neva late!!" Impressed kabikku said as he run fast round the city to search him "Ok...then we have to start without him..." kabikku said "Nah dont worry, nothing is happening if he's late for one time

" Mile smiling said. An hour later the concurse, nothing of the group was the winner so.
"sheezy news!! Police have found a death person" A boy shouted 'I wonder who is it?' Dakermon thought, then Nyoko saw the newspaper and said "OMG.. Hey guys look at this!"
All group wanted to see the newspaper, then they have impressed, The person that was murdered was johnny "What the... that's the reason, how this could happen?" Psygirl think and think want to see the past, but she wasnt able,"dammit i dont know why i cant see the past" said psygirl annoyed, "then we have to go to the place" Dusty said. All group is going to the field war.
To be continued...
Comments
dakan Says:
Sorry if my english is so bad DX
DeviousZen Says:
Looks like the start of a great story! Interesting scene you've laid out here...I hope Astellus shall avenge Johnny. =( Speaking of which, I lmao'd when Astellus punched Morgan in the face...she seemed so emo at that point
Keep up the good work man!
Mile Says:
Whoa, what a neat idea for a story, Sheezytown!
Especially when I'm there too
Good work, although you still have to work on your English, you're getting better and better...
Hope you continue soon!