I'm too stunned I finished this tonight (*looks at watch* ... this morning...) to have anything overly witty to say.
This is for a contest put on by the shyguy fanclub on DA, but OH MAN did I ever go nuts with it. The theme was "shyguy romance" which is a laughable thing, really, but ALSO an excuse to draw Satoru/Kaito fluff.
The concept here is that one of them (prolly Kai) is keeping watch during the night while everyone else sleeps, and Toru comes to harrass him. Then of course, neither of them is really keeping watch at all, and Yoshi sneaks up on them. :3
This is my first time drawing Digitigrade Yoshi (he's a little off model I think), and my first successful painting of these guys.
AND OH I FORGOT TO MENTION IT: Teremo has two moons.
It's totally awesome.
To the critique club: I'm "finished" with this, but I have gotten some great crits so far and I will probably toy with it more later. Hopefully. I'd appreciate tips especially about rendering cloth and skin more realistically, painting with coloured light sources, and putting decent textures on ground and trees.
Oh, and about things that are digitigrade... I have trouble gesturing them and they often end up unbalanced or in odd poses. Thanks!
Comments
Yokokyuubi Says:
Wow, that's beautiful. O-O
Nymbrixion Says:
Wow thats really beautiful, i love how you get really smooth textures and shading, and i really like how you did the fire, *tried to draw fire on photoshop myself it came out horrible* but anyways Awesome Job!
i understand you wanted to finish this and it was 5 am, but i the light in the trees could use some refining. they are just blobs of color and while they do represent light i think they don't really look like leaves. the dude in the background 'digitigrade yoshi' (dunno wtf that is ), he is pretty cool and i think he could be in a picture on his own based on the detail . both legs on the same plane though, so his stance looks a little wonky.
as far as our two main figures, the highlights of purple light from the moon and fire light are great. their poses are working, and the girls' face is the best imo. my one issue is that their skin looks like it has been , well, doused in canola oil or something, they look extremely glossy. otherwise, the picture as a whole makes a great little story even though i don't know any of the characters or their circumstances . thumbs up
Riot13O Says:
Ahhh nightly distractions.
Lawls.
I really like how Yoshi turned out. Freakin' kickass lighting too!
Riot13O Says:
LAWL DOUBLE POSTING OMG.
Anyhoos. One thing that confuses me is the size of Yoshi and the size of the trees. Yoshi is a pretty big guy, but it looks like either Yoshi is too big or the forest is too small. Unless this was intentional, then whoops.
I love the grass on the ground near the trees. The lighting is really awesome on that, so g'job. I would, however, add more grass texture to the ground (if you have time) and blend those areas a bit together. Right now it kinda looks like the grass is sprouting from under the tree in parts. If you just add some more grass and kind of made it... fade or something, I think the transition wouldn't be so hard and it would work without having to render fifty million blades of grass. :\
Again, GREAT lighting. Getting light from two sources sucks, but you totally pulled it off like hardcore. Like Rtil mentioned, the skin is a little shiny. One thing I would also fix (I'm trying to think of how to fix it :\) is, especially on Kaito's legs, parts where the skin is meeting fabric look a little off. On Kaito's leg resting out like that (his left leg), it looks a little bit like his leg is bending outwards toward the viewer instead of just being a straight object. Maybe adding another highlight to the fabric would help? Sorry if I sound a little confusing, I totally suck at wording things today.
Freakin' rawk job on the fire, like someone else mentioned here. The only thing I would change is the bottom parts of the wood look a little bare compared to how detailed the rest of the picture is. Just add s'more shadow there and I think it'd be good.
Those masks came out hardcore. :3 As a random note. ESPECIALLY the one on Satoru's head--it really shows both lightsources well.
Anyway, neat stuff neat stuff! Great job on the sky too.
shionyr Says:
First, the Good:
-Nice overall composition. Not too much focus on one single point, and the visual weight is well-distributed throughout.
-Nice color on Yoshi! Didn't notice until you pointed it out but there really is no green at all on him. Very wise "color hinting", definitely not something that all artists can do well.
-The rimlights from the moons read very well.
-Good contours and silhouettes on your cloth and figures.
Then, here's some stuff I think you could fix:
-Darken your darks. Lights and midtones that take up over half the composition are a death sentence for any night scene. Work on making the distant trees and the form shadows on Kai and Sato darker. Good HUES in the shadows, just make them darker and they'll look awesome.
-Again, make the back area of the woods darker. I pointed this out already but I think it's especially important.
-Make Kai's hands bigger and his feet "blockier." People think he looks like a girl and this would be a good way to make him read more as a guy without taking away his more andro/feminine traits. (I think you actually told me once that his hands are bigger than Sato's... lol replacement Ben)
-The hilights on Sato and Kai's skin... either take them out or make them sharper. Human skin doesn't really have hilights, unless you're sweaty or greasy, in which case your skin will have sharp, shiny hilights. So are they getting hot'n'bothered in the moonlight or having a chill time? Let us know with those hilights!
-Moons! Make their edges sharper. Their edges wouldn't be that soft unless it's foggy, in which case the stars wouldn't be there and there'd be fog in the forest. If it's a clear night and you're trying to add a "glow", then put a well-defined circular shape that's considerably brighter than the glow around it, darken the rest of the sky, and add some stars. However, the purple color of the sky creates a warm, balmy effect, which is good for this scene.
-It looks like you used a texture on the ground. Having it blur as it goes back looks fine, until you get to Yoshi's foot and the tree roots. The sharpness of those shapes contrasts with the blurriness of the ground, and it creates some cognitive dissonance. I'd recommend either making the rest of the scene blurry to match the ground (hard) or get rid of the ground texture completely (easy). Just put a solid color and add some rocks and differently-color dirt patches here and there.
I'm rather detail-oriented, so as with all things I could go on all day, but I think you tackled the problem of two light sources and a making-out pose rather nicely. Just fix those values, and that will pretty much make the picture as a whole pop out that much more!
zololover Says:
that's awesome. love how u've done the fire >le clap<